Panic at the Alabaster Inn

Panic at the Alabaster Inn

by Puppycat Productions

Today is Allisse Brenner’s last day in soul-crushing poverty. That’s because it’s her first day of work at the Alabaster Inn, the finest lodging in all the land, and that means full meals, clothes that fit her, and maybe even medicine to save her grandmother’s life. But what place does a girl like her have amongst wealthy merchants, powerful nobles, larger-than-life adventurers? Is she going to be able to make it here? Or is this job going to chew her up and spit her out the way it has so many others? 

The tasks are impossible. The pay is inconceivable. The manager is a vampire. Welcome to the Alabaster Inn.

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The beginning quickly drops you into Allisse’s life as she wakes up late for work on her first day—something many of us may have done. We’re pulled in right away as her hardships keep piling up while she just wants to make it to work. Once we make it to the Alabaster Inn, it’s not long until the setting before us is painted in the vibrant colors of a world just a little above Allisse’s head. She’s soon swept up in her own clumsiness and the eccentricities of their guests, but “Panic at the Alabaster Inn” is woven together as our protagonist bumbles her way through each challenge before making it out in one piece, learning a little and helping out guests along the way.

Story: This story is fun slice of life that grips you early on as it begins with the relatable struggle of Allisse waking up late for work. On her way out the door we see the reason why landing the job is so important, her grandmother who has taken ill. This beginning makes short work of introducing us to the character and was drives her, and it helps seeing the way she navigates the various challenges of her new job feel natural and entertaining.

Style: Puppycat Productions did a great job writing this story. It has solid worldbuilding and a lot of enticing elements with interesting characters that flesh the world out in a fluid way. The nature of Allisse’s job and the people involved in it, be they coworkers or customers, leave a lot of depth to be explored that makes you want to keep reading the next chapter. I think the way all these elements come together makes for a really exciting slice of life.

Grammar: There were a few minor grammar mistakes that mainly made me suspicious of how strict Microsoft Word may be. No real errors stuck out and I could tell Puppycat Productions took the time to make sure their end-product was what they envisioned.

Character: Allisse is the core of this story, and the author doesn’t forget that. Not that this is strange for the protagonist, but we learn a little about her with every interaction and despite the absurdities, the challenges she faces are relatable enough that it makes me want to keep turning the page. To find out how she’ll react to the next challenge and how she’ll grow throughout her new job.

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This is a fun story that I've enjoyed reading so far. At the time of this review, only 3 chapters have released, but I am looking forward to more

The story is fun and interesting, and it is well written. I don't think I spotted many grammatical errors at all, and the story flows well.

The story does a good job at making the characters seem enjoyable and not overbearing. Allisse Brenner is relatable, coming from a poor family and suddenly working in a high establishment is pretty difficult for her and it makes sense she isn't the best at what she was hired to do.

At the pace this story is going I believe that this work will do very well, I'll be keeping an eye on it and enjoy the story of Allisse.

 

 

 

 

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